Reviewer: sis
Anonymous
Date: 06/25/2005 - 12:55 am
Title: Undiscovered
love the story. update SOON!!!
Reviewer: anon
Anonymous
Date: 06/13/2005 - 09:12 am
Title: Forbidden
I would agree with people and say that you definitely need a beta if you care about real writing, but then, don't you have one? A beta is there for grammar and spelling errors - when they make suggestions for that, you should take them. If a beta offers extra advice on the story, that's just an added bonus, and should often times be credited. You should probably slow down everything, make transitions for your storyline, because it could actually be decent if you stopped and spent more time on it. Buffy can't be jumping around only doing actions every new line. You need transitions and thought before you submit, and definitely less errors. It also seems you are asking for sympathy reviews when you leave AN's saying that you did not do a good job on the ch - if it isn't for sympathy, then you willingly submit something that you know hasn't been done with your greatest effort. Despite what you may think, this isn't a flame. I hope you take some of our suggestions, and maybe your work will improve because of it.
Reviewer: Penny
Anonymous
Date: 06/11/2005 - 08:40 am
Title: Undiscovered
No offence but this story is really badly written. It's a good plot and stuff but it's just not written well. The dialogue is really simple and it's kinda like you've just made up people and then just given them names of people from the show.
Reviewer: Fire_starter89
Anonymous
Date: 06/06/2005 - 04:41 am
Title: Forbidden
It's always best to read over your work after you post it, many spelling mistakes can be easily picked up on that way. You can probably find a beta on any fanfic site, if you're still having a lot of trouble other writers will usually put the name of their beta on their work.
You should focus more on writing a story and less on trying to write a cheap porn video.
You should stick to one tense, probably past tense for you until you get a little more experienced.
Smut fics and AU's are harder to write as well, you should practice with some easier stories and wait until you are a more competent writer before trying these sorts of projects.
Reviewer: Anon
Anonymous
Date: 06/06/2005 - 04:41 am
Title: Nothing new
If you are even remotely serious about writing why don't you do yourself and everyone else a favour and read over your work, fix your spelling and your grammar.. get a beta... expand on your plot ideas giving the bare bones a little more flesh and substance... and then maybe you might have a decent fic on your hands.... if however you are simply doing this for the reviews...both good and bad... then I think you should go and see someone about the obvious attention related issues you have.
Reviewer: sarah g
Anonymous
Date: 06/06/2005 - 12:25 am
Title: Nothing new
aww how sad i cant believe therenot getting together and wat about the kid. please let them get together. i love this story and cant wit to read more . please update as soon as u can, cant wait to see wat happens next thanx
Reviewer: spikester0889 Signed
Date: 06/05/2005 - 05:47 pm
Title: Nothing new
Hello! i like this story and cant wait to see what happens...dum dum duuuuuuuuuum lol keep up the good work!
Reviewer: Susan
Anonymous
Date: 06/05/2005 - 04:50 am
Title: Nothing new
Do you only care about are the praises and not the truth on what someone thought on your story/chapter? No matter who the author is, they all make mistakes. No body is perfect. Yet, most of the better established writers in the fandom have at last one beta to read over their chapter to check for spelling/punctuation/grammatical errors. Some even have as many as 5 betas for a story. And most authors like it if someone finds a mistake and points it out to them because they learn from their mistakes.
Do you not realize that there is a place to post your author notes at the beginning and not the end of the chapter? Even without the A/N at the end, your latest chapter only had 633 words. I’m not for sure, and you may check with Pari, but I believe there is a 1,000 word minimum per chapter.
To me, I read your A/N as you just do not care on the quality of your work. But then again, if you do not care why should anyone else.
If it is true that you are deleting the reviews that do not sing your praises than that’s just sad and petty, most people do not read the reviews or let them influence their judgment on if they are going to read a story or not.
Author's Response: Okay first of all Im gonna clear up a few things...Ihave not only deleted the bad reviews I have deleted a few more then that and not all of them were bad I said that now so there is no more to eplain im sorry if you feel that i have only been deleting bad review But its not the truth so go ahead and belive what you want ....thanks for your time.....christina
Reviewer: Cassidy
Anonymous
Date: 06/05/2005 - 03:02 am
Title: Nothing new
I'm sorry, but I thought that when you said that you wanted reviews, you actually wanted to hear what people thought of your story. Apparently not, since you seem to delete every review that doesn’t say that your story is great. I’m sorry to say this, but I think that it would be best if you just wrote your story down on a paper, so that no one else got to read it, then you wouldn’t get these reviews, and you would probably be happier, or whatever. Suggestion, get a beta.
Reviewer: Anonymous
Anonymous
Date: 06/05/2005 - 02:30 am
Title: Nothing new
Your story has the potential to be a good story, but you have several spelling, punctuation and grammatical error through out the story that makes it hard to read. The timeline and plot are not very believable. How would Buffy know that she is pregnant the next day? After how Joyce reacted to the news of Buffy and Angel sleeping together in season 2, I cannot see her happy about this situation because “they are in love” and would allow Buffy to drop out of school and move away. I would suggest finding a beta to help.
Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed
Date: 06/05/2005 - 01:17 am
Title: Nothing new
loved it but did they get back together and did buffy and spike get on the plane together or just her by herself?
Reviewer: Caitie Signed
Date: 06/05/2005 - 12:22 am
Title: Nothing new
Great chapter - I loved it, cause it was so so sweet! Can't wait for more, so please post the next chapter as soon as you can! Take care, C ; )
Reviewer: tina
Anonymous
Date: 06/05/2005 - 12:15 am
Title: Nothing new
omg wow way to leave someone hanging and in a good way luv the story so much update soon
luvs much
Reviewer: Bint
Anonymous
Date: 06/04/2005 - 09:08 pm
Title: Nothing new
more soon plz!!!!!!!!!!1
Reviewer: Kimber
Anonymous
Date: 06/04/2005 - 10:34 am
Title: leavin it to change
Is Joyce going to let her drop out of school? What kind of jobs will she get in Vegas at 16 or 17.....she has to be at least 21 where booze and gambling is sold.....hmmmm, I guess there's McDonald's. Or under the table not nice jobs in the sleeze section......Spike should've been a little faster, so rude man......not using protection while, cough, while breaking the law with having sex with a minor, bad rude man. Make it better soon please......she will think she's fat and ugly soon.......LOL.....
Reviewer: Caitie Signed
Date: 06/04/2005 - 08:19 am
Title: leavin it to change
Oh no! Please let Spike get there before Buffy leaves!!! Can't wait for more of this great fic, so please update as soon as you get the chance! Take care, C ; )
Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed
Date: 06/04/2005 - 02:11 am
Title: leavin it to change
great updates and i hope they reunite soon and she tells him about the baby
Reviewer: Bint
Anonymous
Date: 06/03/2005 - 09:09 pm
Title: leavin it to change
aww omg i love it more soon plz!
Reviewer: Caitie Signed
Date: 06/03/2005 - 07:53 pm
Title: Undiscovered
What an interesting fic, so far! It's so touching, every chapter so far, and now I can't believe Buffy's preggars! Can't wait for more of this fic, so please update soon!
Reviewer: Kimber Signed
Date: 06/03/2005 - 04:52 pm
Title: Undiscovered
girl I was ready to reach in and smack you silly, LOL....well I think he'd better drop the first sister first......bad form to write to one of his love and still be living and as been doing the other.....bad spikey......if he's asking her to come to him, he could have least broken up with Dru first.......like if I can't have you'll settle for you sister, LOL....bad bad Spikey....LOL he is a bad rude man.......LOL
Reviewer: tv
Anonymous
Date: 06/03/2005 - 02:44 pm
Title: Undiscovered
i like it! i like it! please get rid of dru soon !!
Reviewer: tina
Anonymous
Date: 06/03/2005 - 01:56 pm
Title: Unreachable
i really like this story plz update soon it seems like it is going to be really good later
luvs much
Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed
Date: 06/02/2005 - 10:18 pm
Title: Unreachable
good update but i hope he stays with buffy
Reviewer: Kimber
Anonymous
Date: 06/02/2005 - 04:38 pm
Title: Unreachable
Oh Spikey, seems like you have a problem....if she's upset about the makeout session....how will she feel when she realizes you and Dru still the the horizontal mambo.......and I wonder what Dru has up her sleeve......bad rude woman
Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed
Date: 06/02/2005 - 03:40 am
Title: Sweetest sin
good chapter and i love that song
