Reviewer: londonmarie Signed
Date: 10/29/2009 - 11:49 pm
Title: Chapter 2
I agree with Buffyconvert....SEQUEL!!!!!!
Author's Response: :)
Reviewer: Spikes_slayer08 Signed
Date: 10/27/2009 - 08:43 am
Title: Chapter 2
So sweet and sexy, loved it.
Author's Response:
:)
Reviewer: xoChantelly
Anonymous
Date: 10/23/2009 - 06:47 pm
Title: Chapter 2
Ohhh, yummy smut. Love the bitey/claim. Ending is perfect!
Will email you the banner!
Author's Response: Yay! thanks
Reviewer: xoChantelly
Anonymous
Date: 10/23/2009 - 06:45 pm
Title: Chapter 1
Ohhh, souled!Spike is taking charge. Good fic! (I've read this before, but didn't review. Sorry for my lurker self. Oh, and banner is forming in my mind!)
Author's Response: Yeah it was my first fic
Reviewer: KAte
Anonymous
Date: 09/29/2009 - 01:20 pm
Title: Chapter 2
Good start for a first story. You kind of ignored the fact that Spike is pretty damn crazy during the second chapter. With a little more development of the plot here you could have an awesome story. To just toss the crazy aside without acknowledging it is rough for a reader to accept because it seems like laziness, even when it’s not. Your narrative is solid though, with a little practice you’ll be churning out great stories in no time. Maybe try sending your stuff to a beta reader, a beta can help you smooth over rough spots in the plot, they’re not just for grammar mistakes and typos.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review it was actually quite helpful :)
Reviewer: Buffyconvert
Anonymous
Date: 09/28/2009 - 07:17 pm
Title: Chapter 2
O.K. Ya wanna know what i think? I think you oughta write a sequel - just go with it. Very good and NOT "the end".
Author's Response: You think so? Ehhh I was a bit worried cuz it's the first story I have ever written. I might just do that though. Thanks
Reviewer: Buffyconvert
Anonymous
Date: 09/28/2009 - 07:10 pm
Title: Chapter 1
Good. Well, good except for Willow.
Author's Response: Yeah I pretty much just wrote down what she said in the episode but I really liked how they were all there without knowing it therefore she was a must . Thanks and take care
Reviewer: Anonymous
Date: 09/28/2009 - 03:39 pm
Title: Chapter 2
The details and descriptions were good and you let us know the character's thoughts and feelings as the scene passed. Your writing is good. I was a little uncertain about the plot, however. After all, Spike was driven insane from the guilt and horror of what he'd done from a soul he got because he'd almost raped Buffy. To have him hold her against a wall and insist that he knew she wanted it when she was telling him to let go is a huge plot hole. Remember that motivations and a character's past are important so the reader can believe in the story and the character's decisions.
Author's Response: Thank you, this is my first fic so I appreciate your input. I know maybe I took it down a shaky road with Spike but I tried to have Buffy resist only slightly. Once again thanks and take care. :)
