Reviewer: Cate
Anonymous
Date: 08/27/2008 - 08:58 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
Oh no! Update please!!!!???? I'm totally going through withdrawal here.
Reviewer: Cate
Anonymous
Date: 08/27/2008 - 08:25 am
Title: Paint It Black
This chapter is written absolutely wonderfully. I think I counted at 20 allusions within it and could draw rock from every single one of them. The thing, however, that I don't get with the teens of my age, is the whole "emo" concept (Although outwardly I may fit under the whole "emo" concept, with my open devotion to rock and clear, yet not outragously evident, anarchist attitude, even though I am in a "popular" group at school, even though popular has a much different meaning in Australia than America); most of these idiots wouldn't know depression if it hit them in the face, but maybe I've been grossly uninformed of what an "emo" is, however you have encaptulated an extreme empathy for these "outcasts"... I really can't get enough of this story
Reviewer: Cate
Anonymous
Date: 08/27/2008 - 08:06 am
Title: The Downward Spiral
I hate Spike. I hate him so much in this chapter. The funny thing is I rarely ever hate anyone, but this is just evil in its own discrepancies-- no remorse, no emapthy--- hollow. I can't even flick the recommendation to "liked it" even though I absolutely love this story, and will continue to the finish... it's just... I'm pissed!
Reviewer: Cate
Anonymous
Date: 08/27/2008 - 07:57 am
Title: Innocence
Oh bloody hell. You really got me crying now!
Reviewer: Cate
Anonymous
Date: 08/27/2008 - 07:49 am
Title: Surprise
I really loved this chapter. The teacher actually resembled an actual teacher. Do Mr. D. He "has a backbone" lol.
Reviewer: Cate
Anonymous
Date: 08/27/2008 - 07:39 am
Title: Nutshell
Wow.. I hate Spike so much you made me cry! So wonderfully written... how do you do that?
Reviewer: Cate
Anonymous
Date: 08/27/2008 - 07:33 am
Title: Crazy Train
Wow... I think I took a total of one breath the entire chapter.... eek scary! You're really good at the tension!
Reviewer: Cate
Anonymous
Date: 08/27/2008 - 07:23 am
Title: Smells Like Teen Spirit
Gotta say... I hate these "outcasts" as much as I hate the "populars" in this story. Sure their music tastes show some sort of intelligence (in direct contrast to the popular hip-hop shit), but to go as far as to ruin somebody's home for pitiful revenge. Sure in Australia we have the same sort of segregation, however not to the spiteful extremes... I gotta ask is American schooling really like that? I thought it was just a mindless stereotype from crappy teen-flics and and after-school specials! That's enough of my ranting (you most probably think I'm a bitch... I am just curious...) I do however absolutely love your story (please ignore my previous curious nature if it upset you in any way). Spike is mean, Buffy is... well at first mean, now I feel very sorry for her... Angel is surprisingly adorable, Cordelia is wonderful, and Riley is just hilariously stupid! I must say I love the angst! I can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: Cate
Anonymous
Date: 08/27/2008 - 05:20 am
Title: Closer
I really love this story. I can't wait for Riley to have his ass handed to him!
Reviewer: Isa
Anonymous
Date: 09/21/2007 - 04:51 pm
Title: Changes
Wow!!! I love how you just jumped right into the story instead of making people wait for his transformation.
Really grabbed my attention!!!
Looking forward to reading and reviewing Chapter 2 ☺
Reviewer: anonymouse
Anonymous
Date: 09/20/2007 - 07:54 pm
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
more please
Reviewer: anon
Anonymous
Date: 09/19/2007 - 10:47 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
loved it can't wait till some spuffy.
Author's Response: Thanks. :)
Reviewer: PhotographyNut
Anonymous
Date: 09/18/2007 - 07:15 pm
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
Great chapter! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thank you! :D
Reviewer: jeanieofoz
Anonymous
Date: 09/15/2007 - 04:13 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!love it!
hope the big bad headaches go away and you find your head again
Author's Response: thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you tha... *out of breath* Thank you! :D
Reviewer: secretguest
Anonymous
Date: 09/14/2007 - 06:56 pm
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
Hope it turns out well. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: It could be kinda fun, no? :) Thanks for commenting.
Reviewer: scaryscouse
Anonymous
Date: 09/14/2007 - 06:48 pm
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
looking forward to the next chapter, although I have got lost with some of the story, I have stuck with it and it seems to be coming out the other side
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm trying to pull through as best I can. ;)
Reviewer: jadangel2001
Anonymous
Date: 09/14/2007 - 09:56 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
argh! you evil, evil person you! how can you put them together in such a tight space when they're...hang o, this might be rather good to read actually *smacks self in the head - quit complaining jade!* ohh, now i can't hardly wait, yay! hope your head's a bit etter, and well done you for getting your writing class, you'll do great with that, not that you need anyone to tell you that of course! but yeah, i'll stop...rambling...now, mouth ran away with me again! :$
Author's Response: :) It could be kinda fun, no? The bestest car ride in the universe! :D Thanks for reviewing. You're absolutely wonderful, especially commenting my writing. You know that makes me smile. :)
Reviewer: jadangel2001
Anonymous
Date: 09/14/2007 - 09:42 am
Title: Back In Black
i don't believe i only just, going to read your update of chapter 27, found ihadn't finished reading 26! i must've got called away, cos i remembersome, than not the poem! it's great, as always, the way you write, well, your're an inspiration, you really are, i love to read it slowly and enjoy the way you use language in your writing. another great update, as always!
Author's Response: This was a truly inspiring review, I'm not kidding. Nothing better than going back to writing after reading a review like this. Thank you so much! :D
Reviewer: Avalon
Anonymous
Date: 09/14/2007 - 07:42 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
You are really eeeevil to your characters. Thanks for sending me the update :)
Author's Response: Heh heh, you know it. :) No other way to write a story. Thanks for commentin'.
Reviewer: pixiecorn Signed
Date: 09/14/2007 - 05:59 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
oooo getting exciting hehe....hope you update again soon
Author's Response: :D Thanks. I'm writing it now.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 09/14/2007 - 05:20 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
Well we all need a way to get our lovers to talk and ANgel and Cordy are there to make sure there is no murders,
Author's Response: No murders, hahaha. Hadn't thought of that. :) They do need to talk, yes. Very much so. Thanks for the review.
Reviewer: Squawks
Anonymous
Date: 09/14/2007 - 03:50 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
I'm so annoyed - I just wrote a review and went to post it and something happened and it disappeared - WAHHH!!!
Hmmm, here's how it went:
- Loved the line "with a suitcase", don't know why
- Chapter not detatched, was great
- Hope to see an update of DSotM as well, cause I love that
- Repeat it was a great chapter
- Thanks for the update.
Sorry, couldn't be assed to write it properly again. I'm lazy : )
Author's Response: Nice summary, LOL. Seriously, thanks for all your support. I somehow knew you would like the "with a suitcase" line, I don't know why. I think I did something similar to that before, and you like it then, too. I dunno about DSoTM; I'm kinda a one-fic guy.
Reviewer: Ariadne Signed
Date: 09/14/2007 - 02:18 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
They will get a lovely trip *lol*
Author's Response: Lovely trip in a fic called "Black"... heh. Thanks. :D
Reviewer: cocky
Anonymous
Date: 09/14/2007 - 12:27 am
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
“She was just a great person, y’know what I mean? And I can justify her doing all those horrible things to me for all those years because she’s been drowning since she was five and she was young... but I can’t possibly do the same thing for what I’ve done and I think I’m just starting to realize that...”
I had to comment on that. I completely disagree with that. Spike can't justify the way he treated buffy. But buffy can't justify the way she treated Spike either. I don't care how bad of a home life she had. I had terrible things happen to me when I was a kid. But does that mean that it is ok for me to treat people just as bad. No, it isn't. It doesn't give me a right.
If buffy was such a great person she wouldn't have treated Spike the way she did. All he did was love her and she did him wrong. Not right and not something a great person would do. That is what I don't like. People always tend to hold Buffy like she some kind of saint.
I also hope spike doesn't take angel advice and be bad ass again. That isn't who he is. Who he really is William. At least I think that. Spike has always held on to William even when he was bad. William always linger there. Cause deep down that is who Spike is. Just my opinion afterall.
I would also be mad as hell at Angel for saying it is ok for Buffy to come. Angel knows that Spike and Buffy have problems. He really shouldn't have done that. Especially after taking my car.
Author's Response: I always liked "oooo" as a better name than "cocky," FYI. And I must say, I also like your comments because they are very honest. I don't think I agree with Spike's statement, here, either, at all, but I'm not writing what I'm feeling; rather, I'm writing Spike. And right now he's feeling, well, not feeling, he's empty because of what he did. He thinks he destroyed her, and because he doesn't have her and can't have her he thinks he destroyed perfection. I'm writing from his POV, you see. I don't condone torture for years, and I have not forgot; the premise of this story is that she was bad to him so now he's bad in general. I will not forget, either, and it will probably turn into a big part of the story because it is the premise. Again, if you are looking for Buffy as not a saint, look at seasons five and six canon and the plethora of season six fics on this site. Hell, even season four puts Buffy in a less-than-light place; she's basically in a passionless relationship with Riley because Angel told her to do that. If that isn't terrible and doesn't put her in a bad light, I don't know what is. I completely agree that Spike is not fully meant for badassery; however, I do think it is a *part* of his character. He is, above all, like you said, William, though. I've tried to tease that out throughout the story, that his inner William is there. And last, yeah, I'll clear up the whole Buffy coming thing next chapter. Thanks for commenting.
Reviewer: Sandy
Anonymous
Date: 09/13/2007 - 11:44 pm
Title: Everything In Its Right Place
Oh, I can't wait for the next chapter. The sparks are gonna be 'fun'. There will be sparks, right? Right?? None of this 'polite conversation' or even worse, deafening silence - gasp! Ok?!
Come back soon, looking forward to more.
Sorry about the headaches, hopefully nothing serious.
Author's Response: Heh, I can't guarantee anything, but it'll be fun to write and read, if nothing else. Thanks for the review. :D
