Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 09/21/2012 - 03:43 am
Title: Epilogue
The story is pretty good. I think throughout, Spike is TOO controlling and volatile, bordering on violent. After what Buffy went through with Angel, it IS believable that she would be inclined to get involved with someone as obviously controlling as Spike, but that doesn't mean that's a good choice for her -- I do like that you didn't make Spike to a total 180 in the end, but in real life, someone like Spike wouldn't have been able to change even that much. Ultimately, he was too "not nice" and not nice guys tend to stay not nice, unless they're getting years of therapy.
You do write the emotions so well, especially the tender parts and the angst and sorrow...you're really good at getting the tears going.
But really, this story needs a really strict editing. Some words make no sense in context, there are a lot of repeated drastic grammar & spelling problems; really made it hard to read at times.
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 09/21/2012 - 12:33 am
Title: Chapter 6: 'Knight's Lady'
This story is going pretty well, but the grammar, spelling and vocab problems do make hard to read at points... needs a spell check and a strong editing.
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 09/20/2012 - 07:56 pm
Title: Chapter 3: 'Don't Ever Go Away From Me'
Ok, I'm having trouble with this. I understand that Buffy can love him and be righteously pissed about his attitude, but, since she's sensible enough to get pissed about it, why would she even ASK PERMISSION to have a life? She should be pissed at the thought of even asking if it's OK.
A note: it sounds like you are using "liberal arts degree" as if it's a degree in the arts... it's not; my Political Science degree is a liberal arts degree. See htp://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Liberal_arts for more info.
And there are plenty of spelling/grammar errors that are jarring as I read; I've been trying to ignore them, but the last part of this chapter is especially bad (should be: "precautions," "prescription," and "prophylactics," for examples).
And having the doc be "Alexis Denisof" seems kinda creepy, like it's the actual actor guy, not a character.
Reviewer: VETTE
Anonymous
Date: 04/18/2012 - 11:42 am
Title: Epilogue
Loved reading this story, it kept me up but was worth it!
Reviewer: rkm
Anonymous
Date: 04/06/2010 - 06:36 pm
Title: Epilogue
loved, loved this! this makes this spuffy reader incredibly happy - great storytelling, good characters, realistic problems, happy (but realistically) ending. ironically my favorite parts are when we get to hear jennifer, and her conversations between her and william and her and buffy. great, great story!
Reviewer: Elena
Anonymous
Date: 04/26/2009 - 08:50 am
Title: Epilogue
I really enjoyed this story. I think your stories are just getting better and better. There is just one little disappointment I wanted to share. I was expecting Will to have a revelation after she had left him while brooding over the painting of him as a black knight. I thought that would have been a nice tie in. For me, he was still too angry up until Jenny came and I know you said that you wanted to show him changing even without intervention. Again, it was a SMALL disappointment and I loved this story. I look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for sharing your talent, imagination, and insight.
Reviewer: sc
Anonymous
Date: 03/24/2009 - 07:42 am
Title: Epilogue
great story! And I can't wait to start on the sequel, if there is a sequel :)
Reviewer: Olinka
Anonymous
Date: 09/14/2008 - 01:54 am
Title: Epilogue
Very original story :) I only wish, however, that Buffy would be more persistent - Spike nearly raped her, and she just let it go !
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/19/2007 - 06:52 am
Title: Epilogue
OH I loved it.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/19/2007 - 06:37 am
Title: Chapter 25: 'No Contest!'
and so their new life begins, with a phrase from their old.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/19/2007 - 06:24 am
Title: Chapter 24: 'Bridges'
he really did give it all up for her wonder where they will go as there friends are in Sunnydale, explains why he drove and brought the cat.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/19/2007 - 06:11 am
Title: Chapter 23: 'A Mother's Insight'
Oh that was great, she reall got through to him.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 08:50 pm
Title: Chapter 22: 'This Is Getting Ridiculous'
OH I wonder what Mommy wants to talk to him about.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 08:43 pm
Title: Chapter 21: 'Oh Canada!'
OH I thought she was pregnant a while back. I hope Giles doesn't go I don't think it will help Spike case with Buffy.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 08:30 pm
Title: Chapter 20: 'I Know You Still'
Oh what did she want to tell him before she got called away.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 08:22 pm
Title: Chapter 19: 'I Love You; Don't Hang Up'
oh he didn't he didn't even listen to his mother, good thing Tara warned her.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 08:15 pm
Title: Chapter 18: 'He'll Be Waiting'
Oh so she called him.
I have to say this, Victoria, Canada should have a province behind it, I am assumming you mean British Columbia, but there is more than one Victoria, Canada.
Sorry, just a Canadian who works for a company where we have that mix up everyday.
LOved it
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 08:01 pm
Title: Chapter 17: 'Dear Will'
Oh I feel so sorry for the cat actually. I cryed with that letter, I hope he finds her soon.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 07:49 pm
Title: Chapter 16: 'The Only Time He Feels Complete'
She didn't take her cat, I feel sorry for both of them, and the cat.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 07:35 pm
Title: Chapter 15: 'Will You?'
If she marries him how will she leave.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 07:25 pm
Title: Chapter 14: 'Leaving'
Well at least he calmed down some.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 07:04 pm
Title: Chapter 13: 'We've Got All Night'
oh this is not good, can't wait the the out burst
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 06:57 pm
Title: Chapter 12: 'Realizations'
but now Buffy thinks the whole pack was like that when it wasn't. Oh Ilike.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 06:41 pm
Title: Chapter 11: 'Forgiveness'
OH I loved it and we got to see a different side of Spike.
Reviewer: smlcspike Signed
Date: 07/18/2007 - 06:26 pm
Title: Chapter 10: 'I'd Be Bloody Lost'
Oh I am not seeing the good with Angel out, I wonder what she will tell him to the black
