Reviewer: Miranda Signed
Date: 08/28/2013 - 08:45 pm
Title: Follow the Cops Back Home
This was a good follow up to the first story, I , enjoyed it but the grammer was wrong alot and I found myself correcting it in my head. This kind of takes away from reading it.
Author's Response: Sorry you feel that way!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 07:33 pm
Title: Follow the Cops Back Home
I get that you write how you feel and how it flows, and that's the way it should be... doesn't mean even the best authors forego the use of a good editor to get the nitpicky stuff right! It's how stuff gets ready to be published professionally. Totally your call as these stories are your babies, I get that. But just because you think something is your style doesn't mean it's not just poor grammar, IMHO. Cheers -- I do love your stories, you have a lot of talent and I appreciate all the work!
My best!
Author's Response: Its just I think everyone else who reads it sees it as style, as I've never had it pointed out before as a problem. Thats the only reason I labelled it as your issue, because everyone else doesn't feel it gets in the way, and I personally feel they make it better, so its not something I'm ever going to change. And its not necessarily because they are my babies, because if I thought it would sound better your way and read better for the average reader I would honestly change it, however I think it would just read better for you alone, or for a minority of people with your opinion. Thank you for the reviews, I do appreciate the time and effort you've took to read and comment. But at the end of the day if I purposely ignore it it is my style, and I don't think it needs to be edited for publishing if I ever was so lucky, because look at fifty shades of grey! That book is bad on so many levels and obviously never got an editor and its been read by everyone across the world! My best to you and thank you for reading!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 06:52 pm
Title: Soulmates
Such a good story! I could find some picky issues with the past few chapters, but please understand I think you're a fantastic writer. Your plot and characters and development are really excellent.
Totally understand about the migraine and aura, they suck.... a reminder to take care of yourself and that you need time to heal and rest occasionally.
Best to you!
Author's Response: I think I do do too much occasionally, when I first got them I kept a diary to look for a common denominator and the only thing was stress or stressful events in the days before I get one. Sometimes you can't help that though, I wish you didn't understand because I really feel for anyone who also suffers! The best to you too!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 06:42 pm
Title: Kitty Litter
Aaahhhhh!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 06:36 pm
Title: Unisex
So good!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 06:31 pm
Title: Twenty Years
Good chapter. I get what you said about Dawn, about Buffy needing to figure out what she could accept on her ow, and I agree with that. I like the idea that Dawn might have called Spike to start to make amends with him... so that when he came back, Dawn/Spike would have been starting to heal already, too.
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 06:20 pm
Title: For What It's Worth
Good! One foot in front of the other!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 06:03 pm
Title: Battle For The Sun
Ugh.. so sad. Tears on my cheeks.
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 05:35 pm
Title: Kings Of Medicine
Oh, the angst!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 05:07 pm
Title: You Don’t Care About Us
Yes! Want to hit them hard! Oh, feelings, so much easier to run away from them! -sigh-
Quibble: I think the "laid" here needs to be "lay."
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 04:34 pm
Title: This Picture
Oh, sucks for them all. Gotta get back to love, people...
Quibbles: a "laid" that should be a "laying" and I think there might have been some punctuation issues.
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 04:04 pm
Title: I'll Be Yours
Oh, bother... and things had been on a good arc. Well, maybe this sets up the catharsis they all need.
Quibbles: A few punctuation errors, and a "laid" that should be "lay" (the past tense of lie), and a "scrapping" that should be "scraping."
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 03:34 pm
Title: Speak In Tongues
Awesome! Good for Buffy, good for Spike.
Quibbles: A few issues in this chap, too, including, " She laid her head back" should be "lay." The lay/lie difference and conjugation is SUPER hard, I have problems myself doing it on my own. I almost always look them up to make sure!
Author's Response: Ignore all the lay/laid...again I ignore what "should be" and always write what flows better. Sorry if this bothers you, but I won't reply to the rest, because you're repeating the same issue and its not an issue to me, but a choice! Trust me I look them up, but then I ignore them!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 03:13 pm
Title: Teenage Angst
Really good chap.
Several fairly minor boo-boos.
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 02:40 pm
Title: Breathe Underwater
Rough, but well-written scene... they all need some therapy!
Notes:
"…Buffy forgot all about why her and Spike had come here in the first place." Should be "…why she and Spike…"
"… when she wasn’t even passed this stage yet?" Should be "past"
Author's Response: I except the passed one, although confused about it. However again the she/her thing is on purpose (see other comments).
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 02:23 pm
Title: Swallow
Such a good exploration of grief and how messy and personal and ugly it can be. But it's so important!
Note:
"She felt their judging eyes on her and she couldn’t bare it." Should be "bear."
Author's Response: Got me!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 02:16 pm
Title: The Never-Ending Why
Be strong, Buffy!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 02:03 pm
Title: Devil in the Details
Oh, Buffy... don't run away and avoid... you know that never works!
Note: "Spike and her had only just started sleeping together again" should be "Spike and she..."
Author's Response: Thats a personal choice...I really hate the way "Spike and she" sounds, I think it sounds very VERY false and doesn't flow. I appreciate thats how it should be written, but I would never write it that way. not my style!
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 01:52 pm
Title: Come Undone
Good chap. Like that it looks like Buffy's asking to have her needs met... it's healthy, hope she keeps that up. Hard to do when you're grieving, especially when you're feeling guilty.
Couple of notes:
"they’d laid together" should be "they'd lain together"
and Spike saying "its time" should be "it's time" if he means "it is time...." That is what he means, yeah?
Author's Response: You got me there, these are the first of your issues I identify as actual mistakes. Unfortunetly I don't have a beta so I can over look the odd thing when I'm tired.
Reviewer: ScarlettDuck Signed
Date: 12/03/2012 - 01:33 pm
Title: Follow the Cops Back Home
Whew, a start that sucks you right in, keeps you reading. Poor family, will be so hard w/o Joyce.
Btw, since you'd asked me in a review of "Protect Me from What I Want" to give examples of errors, I just wanted to point out one from this chap: "…something he used to do when her and Spike would test him..." should be "…something he used to do when she and Spike would test him…" Easiest way to know if you're doing that one right is to take out the "and Spike" to see if it still makes sense. Like, you would never say "…when her would test him" so you know then it has to be "she" instead of "her."
Author's Response: This is what I meant by style of writing, all of those are specific choices. I think there are two kinds of writers, ones that get bunged up with how it "should be" and ones who may not look as professional and serious, but don't agree with the should be's and just write the way that makes sense for them. I'm the second :) I appreciate you giving examples because now I see the majority aren't errors. I'm sorry if that makes it hard for you to read, but I will continue to write that way! Thank you for the review and for responding to my reply! x
Reviewer: sallyntmare Signed
Date: 12/02/2012 - 02:03 pm
Title: Soulmates
Loved it! Thank you for sharing. I really need to read the story that took place before this. Happy to hear you're already writing another fiction.
Author's Response: Thank you so much fore reading, I've appreciated all of your reviews. I've written the first Chapter of my new fic already, but won't be uploading until after the Xmas holidays probably. Check out my twitter (in my profile) if you want to hear more in the meantime! x
Reviewer: sallyntmare Signed
Date: 12/02/2012 - 02:00 pm
Title: Kitty Litter
hah. I loved the smut but I did miss 'the talk' glad to hear its in the next chapter. Can't believe the next chapter is the end.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! :)
Reviewer: Jaime
Anonymous
Date: 11/27/2012 - 06:28 am
Title: Soulmates
Great ending. I'm looking forward to your next story. I read the teaser and I'm really intrigued already.
Author's Response: Glad you're intrigued! And thanx for the review! :)
Reviewer: crazylife
Anonymous
Date: 11/25/2012 - 02:58 pm
Title: Soulmates
Loved both of the these from begining. The emotion you put into the actions/reactions was so real. Can't wait for the next one.
Author's Response: Thank you! How lovely to find a review already! Made my evening :) thanx so much for reading my stories and hope I can continue to deliever! x
Author's Response: *Deliver - obviously too excited lol
Reviewer: sallyntmare
Anonymous
Date: 11/24/2012 - 01:30 pm
Title: Unisex
I think that Giles will react well. He has probably has his suspisions for some time. Hopefully dawn will step up and support them incase Giles has a problem.
Author's Response: Just updated twice and finished the story. Hope you like!
