Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 01/15/2009 - 03:39 pm
Title: Trois
Like mother like son... so they were both after Buffy (well Riley because of Pat).
Scary to think one of her stalkers has found her now :(
Can't hurt that Spike wants to help her.
Reviewer: PhotographyNut
Anonymous
Date: 01/14/2009 - 07:34 pm
Title: Trois
What an awful thing to have happened to Buffy. It's a good thing she met Spike. Can hardly wait for the next update!
Reviewer: Mary
Anonymous
Date: 01/14/2009 - 03:19 pm
Title: Trois
ok, it may be a dumb question but can you try to explain the whole "being raped by Pat" thing? Kind of confused....
Author's Response: That's not a dumb question. Men aren't always the ones who are rapists. And even then it's not always with someone of the opposite sex. So I made this rapist a woman and I made her rape another woman. Well girl in this sense. I hope that answers your question. If not just ask me more and I'll explain more.
Reviewer: tammy
Anonymous
Date: 01/14/2009 - 01:23 pm
Title: Deux
I can't wait to see what happens next.
Reviewer: clo
Anonymous
Date: 01/12/2009 - 07:36 pm
Title: Un
hey! i like the story (it's very cute!) but if you care not all of the french was correct. here is what i saw:
good luck is "bonne chance"
"i don't want you to fall" is "je ne veux pas que vous vous tombez" (the vous is repeated because it's reflexive)
and i think you were going for "excuse me but could you" but you can just say "excusez-moi mais pouvez-vous..." which is "excuse me but can you" and it makes more sense.
Author's Response: Yea I actually speak French. But thanks for your edits. It's been a while since ice actually used my skills and obviously they're lacking. So thanks!! Cheers :)
Reviewer: PhotographyNut
Anonymous
Date: 01/12/2009 - 07:16 pm
Title: Deux
You've got me on the edge of my seat now! Can't wait for the next update!
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 01/12/2009 - 06:17 pm
Title: Deux
Buffy was really scared; sounds as if she had a stalker before. Looking forward to find out.
Author's Response: You never know. I'm still in the thinking process. So it might be a couple of days before anyone finds out. But keep watching :)
Reviewer: Stargazer
Anonymous
Date: 01/12/2009 - 03:04 pm
Title: Un
Hey, great start and I'm looking forward to reading more. Just one little thing. I notice that Spike said:
"[I'm from] Sheffield. It's near London."
I just wanted to let you know that Sheffield is actually 3 hours away from London - A good 200 miles.
It's actually nearer cities like Birmingham and Manchester.
Just my useless UK knowledge for you. I have to make that journey twice a year - it's nowhere near London, by British standards. :)
Author's Response: Thanks. I guess my geography is a bit off. But hey at least I didn't say Glasgow or something. ;)
Thanks for your encouragement. The second chapter should be up soon.
Cheers :)
Reviewer: PhotographyNut
Anonymous
Date: 01/10/2009 - 04:29 pm
Title: Un
Great beginning! Can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: Anonymous
Date: 01/09/2009 - 01:32 pm
Title: Un
wow, yeah, you really need a beta.
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 01/09/2009 - 12:39 pm
Title: Un
*nods* A beta is very helpful. You don't make a difference between buffy and Buffy etc.; makes it harder to read.
Besides that - a good start. I like the twist. Evil of Spike to blast his music so loud. *gg*
Author's Response: Thanks. And yes, I do realize i forgot to use capitals. That's one of the problems of writing it on an iPod. :) I'm going to go through it again and fix it then repost it. But thank you for your help
Reviewer: RB
Anonymous
Date: 01/09/2009 - 02:15 am
Title: Un
Good start, but you might want to get a beta. You can find a link for them in the menu of this site. It's difficult to read a story with grammatical errors. Looking forward to reading more.
Author's Response: Yes, I'm sorry about the problems with it. I'm going to go through it and fix it then repost it. Thank you though for your encouragement :)
