This is really good so far! Can't wait to read more. Only one thought on this, its not your writing style cause that is great, but perhaps you could space your paragraphs more evenly? It's quite hard to read one massive block at a time.

Author's Response: Thank you for reading, and cdefinately thank you for reviewing. And I couldn't agree more about the spacing. I had my paragraphs all nice and spaced when it was on my word processor, but for some reason I've had difficulty with this site and uploading it in the same format. As soon as I figure that out it will be fixed, believe me, I hate the spacing worse than you.