Reviewer: rranne Signed
Date: 09/03/2011 - 02:04 am
Title: Powerful Babies
I read this story several months ago and I liked it in spite of its spelling and grammer flaws. The story line seems sound and I, for one, would like to see how it ends. I hope the author resumes it someday.
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 02/06/2008 - 05:24 pm
Title: Powerful Babies
Giles knows about the prophecy, huh? B. + S. will be the last to know it seems. Looking forward to their reactions.
Author's Response: Yeah they wont know until she gets 'fat' and then...that'll give it away :D
Thanks for your review!
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 02/05/2008 - 04:45 pm
Title: Noon-thirty
Even if the TV was boring they had a nice evening :)
Two new visitors.. sounds as if Buffy and Spike have to take care of them out of a special reason.
Yes indeed. Their children. And another prophecy.... not everything is decided then, for the light or the darkness (what the children will fight for).
Author's Response: Yeah it will expain its self more as time gose on and yes they are their little ones. Thanks for the review!
*hugs*
Candie!
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 01/24/2008 - 04:58 pm
Title: Wonders
Glad to hear you were lucky to find someone to beta your story / help you with your story.
Glad too to see Buffy so carefree now, able to have some time together with Spike. But what happened with Dawn now *wonders*
Author's Response: Muhahaha! I haven't desided yet but it has something to do with her beeing the key...I'm gonna re-write the next chap soo its gonna be while before its posted, Thanks for the review and yeah people where right about betas they help alot! sory it took me so long to respond I was at Disney World :D
Reviewer: Mia
Anonymous
Date: 01/22/2008 - 05:17 pm
Title: Where are you?
Hey guys, just noticed for chapter 1 - you'll see the last half of the page is in italics. To fix this go to edit, and after the word 'something' , put < / i > but without the spaces, which will stop the rest from being in italics.
Author's Response: will do!
Thanks
*Hugs!*
Reviewer: MelBelle
Anonymous
Date: 01/18/2008 - 03:56 pm
Title: Every Time We Touch
Hey I liked it, I felt a bit bad for Angel but hey this is Spuffy right now....lol...So anywho, I love how you put the Immortal into it, and how Spike remembered her. love it. :D Good job.
Author's Response: Thanks soo much!
Reviewer: Spikes mrs
Anonymous
Date: 01/13/2008 - 05:36 pm
Title: Where are you?
Okay I'm sorry but there are just too many mistakes in the first few paragraphs for me to even think about finishing the whole chapter....
You need to looking at the spacing as well because it's kooky.... And if a 12 year old wrote this chapter, I believe the lanuage should be toned down a tad....I wouldn't except that from my own daughter who's 19...
I think you have a good idea but you really need to think about presentation and style, all writers have their own and yours could do with alot of work Sweetie...
I really hate posting a review like this but I really think you need to rethink your whole chapter and rewrite it using spell~checker on word plus the grammar check. If you haven't got those look at a dictonary and your english text books for help with how to write a story...
At your age you should be aiming for Flesch~Kincaid grade level of at least 8~9....
Hope you sort out your problems and don't think this was in any way a review to disway you from writing....
Spikes Mrs
Author's Response: yeah i know but i'm trying to get a beta and ill be editing it and well yes my little sister wrote it she's a little bad mouth around her friends and me and she dosen't mind it so that ones for her and i cant spell ether i get like all D's in that class so yeah we despretly need a beta and we will try to get one we're trying varry hard! if you know any that would be wonderfull!
Thanks,
Amy
Reviewer: Pari Signed
Date: 01/13/2008 - 01:20 pm
Title: Every Time We Touch
I know it may seem mean, but this is why I let these two chapters be posted, after having denied them numerous times. Even though I sent you numerous email telling you that you need a beta, you need to proofread, you still insisted on submitting your fic. So, I knew the readers would be honest, and I appreciate that they were all very constructive and not nasty. So now you see why I wouldn't allow the fic, and why I have denied chapter 3. You need to get a beta, now that 4 of us have said as much, hopefully you'll listen. I won't allow any further chapters, until they are fixed, also you need to go back through these two and fix them as well. Mind you they are 'MUCH' better than how they first started out, but they still need some fixing, and as I told you before I don't have the time to do it for you. Sorry.
Author's Response: its okay but i have no idea where to get one i tried to ask a few of my friends but they are no better then i am i gusse so if you know any i would really like it if you could let me know of them thanks
Candie&Amy
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 01/13/2008 - 05:06 am
Title: Every Time We Touch
The summary sounds interesting (= the plot.) What the other two commenter said for Chapter one: There are still errors that you both could find with a spell check (typos like gentel/gentle) or if you had a beta.
(I'm not a beta, I'm not English so I'm not good enough with grammar and spelling to try that.) But I've collected some links to places where to find a beta here. Good luck finding one.
Author's Response: thanks for the site!! I'm looking for one right now! Thanks
Candie& Amy
Reviewer: Ashleigh
Anonymous
Date: 01/12/2008 - 10:05 pm
Title: Where are you?
I would have to agree. If you have so many mistakes in just the summary alone, people would usually not even give the story a chance. I know you're young and this is your first one, but I would really suggest getting a beta reader to look over the chapters before you post them, they really can do wonders with a story. Just a little something to think about.
Author's Response: Hey no prob i just fixed it actualy well th first one anyway, i have no idea where to get a beta but if you know of one please let me know!
TY
Candie
Reviewer: Wanting to be helpful
Anonymous
Date: 01/12/2008 - 10:02 pm
Title: Where are you?
Hi there. I don't want you to be discouraged, but I *do* want to be honest , and in being honest I have to say that while plot-wise this might be of interest, the number of mistakes in your summary and authors note alone are staggering, and surely enough to put most readers off. I suggest you take a moment to read through and take out all the misplaced commas, make sure you are using appropriate spacing and, most importantly, sort out your spelling. I'm sure if you used the spell-checker in whatever program you're using that half the mistakes would be taken care of...and the rest could be addressed simply by you being vigilant and taking the time to correct them.
Author's Response: thanks sry im really not good at spelling so i'll be sure to check it out TY!
