Reviewer: leilei3915 Signed
Date: 07/28/2017 - 07:41 pm
Title: 1. Rough Waters
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Reviewer: Kiera Thornton Signed
Date: 08/13/2009 - 06:37 pm
Title: 9. Love
I'll amend my age correction due to the fact it's AU, but my opinion still stands on Buffy's reaction. I definitely think she would've flipped a lot more, cuz Dawn will always be her baby sister. Also Dawn and Clem... kinda squicky to me, but I survived.
Author's Response: Thanks for being fair in that sense and I think you have absolutely every right to your opinion; I partially agree, though I disagree in some senses. Otherwise, Clem/Dawn IS kind of weird but eh, challenges like these are kinda fun to take on. Thanks for taking the time to write this, it's very sweet and kind of you! *hugs*
Reviewer: Kiera Thornton Signed
Date: 08/09/2009 - 03:00 pm
Title: 10. New Beginnings
Well I did like it. I think there was a lot that could've been improved upon, but overall it was a nice fic. Good luck with your future writing endeavors. :)
Ciao
Author's Response: Hiya Kiera Thornton! *waves* Mhm, I agree, this wasn't exactly my best work but it was a fun writing project and nevertheless, it was rather enjoyable.Thank you SO much for your kind wishes and for leaving a review! *muah*
Reviewer: Kiera Thornton Signed
Date: 08/09/2009 - 02:53 pm
Title: 9. Love
Well I think it's cute, but a tad unrealistic. Firstly because Dawn wasn't 18 in season 6. She was still a sophomore in high school actually... In season 7 she was a junior. Also I think if Buffy caught Dawn having sex with anyone, let alone a demon, she would totally flip out. I definitely don't think she would allow said demon to come back to her house and sleep there. Also, Dawn has blue eyes, not brown.
In one of the paragraphs toward the end you've got some strange parentheses going on. I'm not sure if that was something a beta did and you forgot to change it, but I thought you ought to know. I noticed that this was rated NC-17, but so far it's only been R. If the sex isn't going to actually be described, you should consider changing the rating. But other than that, I think this is a cute story so far. Off to read the rest!
Ciao
Author's Response: Hi Kiera Thornton,
Terribly sorry for not getting back to you sooner for any of your awesome reviews! Life got really tangled and crappy and eh, the fandom had to be put on hold for a bit (with the exception of SOME immature indulging...hey, I'm only human =P)
Regarding your first paragraph, I put this fic at AR because of the age difference so that was a given. Additionally, I agree that it was probably a tad OOC and I'm totally with you there. Though, said demon IS the reason why she and Spike are a happy couple now.
Mhm, mistake on my part. The brunette hair/blue eyes always screws up. Apologies *bows*
Strange parentheses, huh? Well, damn. Thank you for pointing that out! I'll definitely get around to fixing that bit up when I get some free time! As for the rating, I prefer to be safe and stick with R unless I absolutely know where I'm going with a story. This way, it's relatively fair to my readers, as well. But you're definitely right in this case; I'll probably switch the general rating right around to NC-17 for all chappies. Thanks for reviewing, sweetie! I appreciated all the constructive criticism! It's very helpful and strangely motivating! *hugs*
Reviewer: Anonymous
Date: 08/01/2009 - 12:18 pm
Title: 10. New Beginnings
i have a hard time picturing xander say that, i know they can be unreasonable sometimes, but it just seemed a bit too out of character for me. i wasn't really very involved in this fiction, to be honest, i missed a lot because i had to skim all the dawn/clem scenes. sorry, but i just couldn't stomach it. i did enjoy the little spuffy we got though.
Author's Response: Hiya! =) Mhm, I'm afraid I can't really say much for your comments regarding Xander's OOC dialogue, but in my defense, this *is* an AU so you should probably expect characters acting *out* of character. =) Mhm, yes, Dawn/Clem *was* iffy but hey, in the fandom, anything goes, right? *grins* Thanks for reviewing, hon! *waves*
Reviewer: PhotographyNut
Anonymous
Date: 07/31/2009 - 08:51 pm
Title: 10. New Beginnings
Loved the way Buffy gave her 'friends" a piece of her mind! All in all this fic was awesome! Hope to read more from you!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm really happy you enjoyed the ending! *hugs*
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 07/30/2009 - 04:40 pm
Title: 10. New Beginnings
:) Happy spuffy ending.
I even survived Dawn/Clem, that's a first
Author's Response: Greetings cordykitten! =) Aw, thanks for leaving a review! I'm SO glad you enjoyed this fic! : P LOL Yeah, I guess Dawn/Clem was bit to take in but I'm happy you enjoyed it anyways! *hugs*
Reviewer: lindsay Signed
Date: 07/29/2009 - 10:13 pm
Title: 10. New Beginnings
EEEEEKKKKKKKKKKKKkkkkkk lol, i waited for that every time an episode aired, i truly wish it had ended like that. Anya having real friends, Buffy having real friends, Spike having real friends...the people who deserved them never got them. when Anya died in the show i was devastated lol, as well as Spike obviously, and Buffy's 2nd death hit me hard too. Notice how it was all the misunderstood characters that always got offed, even if in some cases it was only temporary? i love that your story offers the complete opposite of the whedonverse, not that i didn't love every part of his creation, but some happiness for those who deserved it would have been wonderful.
I'm very happy with this story, so great job shakes, you did it!!!
Author's Response: LOL When I saw the beginning of your review I was like, "Hell yeah, this has been a damn good day!" Haha, yes, I TOTALLY agree. Spike+Anya having friends was something that I yearned to see but alas, it was not meant to be on air. And you worded it perfectly: the people who deserved them but never got them. Despite the fact that Clem/Dawn's involvement with this fic is crucial yet just plain weird, I think that in the end it was characters like Dawn, Clem, Spike, Anya, Tara and Buffy who were all imperative in just being there for each other, y'know? Haha, yeah, I noticed that too! I mean, c'mon! Spike *and* Anya? They couldn't have offed, like, Giles or something? The guy *deserts* Buffy in season-what? 6? Right? Right after she comes back *From the dead* and he gets to live. *waves hand* Eh, the Whedonverse cannot be questioned, since I'm a Whedonite, but still, I have my doubts about it sometimes! ; )
Well, Lindsay, it was truly a pleasure being able to "talk" about the story in this way. I really loved your reviews, I sincerely did and it's lovely to hear that you enjoyed the ending! *hugs* Thank you SO much for your sweet comments and feedback! Warm wishes for your health, life, and writing!
Reviewer: AMI
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 10:05 pm
Title: 10. New Beginnings
Great story Shakes! I really enjoyed it. Dawn and Clem were kinda strange at first , but they were so cute it didn't matter. =) I loved buffy telling off her idiotic friends and deciding to be with Spike! Yay!!! The way it should been, for realz. !
Congrats on finishing hyour first fic. *hugs*
Author's Response: Hey AMI! =) Thanks so much! Yeah, Dawn/Clem is a bit iffy but it was fun to write! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for kind comments and feedback! *hugs*
Reviewer: MarzBar Signed
Date: 07/29/2009 - 07:39 pm
Title: 10. New Beginnings
Thanks for a fun fic! Who would have guessed about Clem and Dawn?
Author's Response: Greetings MarzBar! =) Aw, I'm SO happy you liked the fic! *hugs* Haha! Yeah, who woulda thunk it, huh? : P Thanks for your review!
Reviewer: lindsay
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 06:43 pm
Title: 9. Love
LOL ok so Spike more focused on Sugarlumps, fantastic name btw, had me lol'ing hard! Dawn being 18 clears my mind about a lot of things too. All in all the chapter was hilariously uplifting and a little hot, i also love that Buffy drops the why's of Dawn's crush, doing something i am apparently not capable of :):):):):):)
I truly cannot wait to read more, good job, reading this has lifted my spirits so thank you. I also cant wait for the showdown between the 'friends'
xx
L
Author's Response: Hey lindsay!!! =) OMG you're like the bestest spuffy-shipper there is! Haha your reviews rock, baby! : D Ookay, sooo, let's see...LOL Haha, yeah, Sugarlumps was, like, the first thing that popped into my head and I was like, "OMG This must be used!!" Glad to see someone appreciated the humor! :P Also, yesh, terrible me! I neglected to include in the first A/N for chapter 1 that in this particular AU, Dawn is 18 years old. I AM glad, however, that this cleared up any of your doubts; don't worry, I'd be kinda worried too if my 15 y/o baby sister was, like, "doing it" with this demon dude. =D Aw, your comments and feedback are too, too kind and they just make me feel all cuddly inside! *don't worry, I'm not some crazy perv stalker. : P* Thank you SOOOOO much for your review, lindsay!! You're THEEE best!!! =)
Reviewer: lindsay
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 06:38 pm
Title: 8. True Confessions
(huge intake of breath, HUGE) GASPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP.
Ok, i really hadnt expected that in this chappy and i love it! The whole chap was wonderful. From her opening up and him just listening, to her admitting he and Dawn was enough, for him realizing his declarations may have been more harmful than good at the time. I really just loved this from beginning to end, though visually again, Dawn and Clem lol (shakes but with a sappy smile). Was she a virgin in this fic by the way? And ooh, i wonder if Clem and Dawn are about to get busted lol, cant wait, off for more!
Author's Response: Aw, it's SOO nice to see more reviews from you! You truly rock my world, hon! Okay, so, I would like to first and foremost thank you for your sweet comments! I'm glad you enjoyed this chappie! Yes, the part about her "realizing his declarations may have been more harmful than good at the time", was exactly what I was getting at! I realize that Buffy truly was a horrible person to Spike in season 6 but I've always believed that it takes *two* people to destroy a relationship, not just one. So, I wanted to emphasize that Spike did have to take the blame for part of the downfall that was their entire relationship. I'm happy to see I achieved that!! =D Also, Dawn/Clem is admittedly a CRAAZY pairing but oh-so fun to write so it's nice to see someone taking it in stride and just chillaxing about it : P. Yes, she was a virgin and I'm terribly sorry I didn't go to in depth with the sex scene, I just wanted to be able to focus more on the Spuffy. But, yes, she was a virgin and Clem was her first *grins*. LOL Thank you SOO much, hon, for your fantabulous review! *smooches*
Reviewer: lindsay
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 06:29 pm
Title: 7. Insecure
poor clem, he was the perfect character to show how the good inside people doesn't have to reflect outwardly. Still iffy on this him and Dawn thing but i shamefully admit only because of the visuals in my head lol, not because i think ugly people (or ugly as seen by some) dont deserve some loving, but because i don't know how old he is and all that skin is gonna get sticky lol.
Really am loving this, off to the next,
xx
L.
Author's Response: Heeey it's my favorite reviewer!! *hee hee, shh.* : P Mhm, yes, I *completely* agree that Clem was the best candidate to expose the good of people. While I didn't formulate this plot by myself, I did have to say that Clem being the matchmaker in this fic, versus Willow, Xander, etc., was seemingly appropriate and almost...natural. : P LOL Yes, no worries, Dawn/Clem is admittedly iffy but I suppose it's b/c not many people explore that pairing! I certainly haven't but I suppose everyone has their preferences, right? : ) Haha, sticky! True, true! Thanks SO much lindsay!! *hugs*
Reviewer: lindsay
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 06:23 pm
Title: 6. Surprises
wow...what a poignant interlude, loved the last two lines so much. I think its human tendency to dehumanize people into categories, lawyer/cashier/mother/shoulder to cry on/support and so on. We forget, because of everything that they are, that in the end theyre just another person with the same needs as most. I remember when my dog died on my bed, there was a big mess, i was a big mess, but the first thing i did was wrap him up and clean the mess so that my sister couldnt see the worse side to it. Later my mom told me that when they had been talking my mother had told my sister, 'She was taking care of you, that's why she cleaned first' and my sisters response was 'well she's so busy taking care of others, who takes care of her?'. It was the first time in years i felt as though they realized i was a person. So well done, almost everybody in the world can relate to those last two lines, and that means it was one of the more rare and powerful statements ive ever heard.
Buffy allowing herself to openly be a girl is touching, Spikes questions were profound but not aggressive, i enjoyed the interaction thoroughly, fantastic job Shakes, i clap for you!
Author's Response: Greetings Lindsay!!! =) It's awesome to hear from you, as usual!! :P I couldn't agree more! Buffy was always seen as Slayer first, everything else later, and that really pissed me off, y'know? But again, you raise a good point; it's only human habit to do this and we can't help it, I guess. I suppose I just wanted to be able to highlight this particular fact that I believe even *Spike* seemed to forget at times. I mean, he was *always* supportive of her, but I feared that he only recognized her needs as a Slayer at times. I wanted Spike, as a character, to be able to see her for everything she was, like *she* saw him as William, Spike in all of one person! :D Aw, I realize it's probably quite late to say it but I'm terribly sorry to hear about the loss of your dog. I lost my pet fish (as pathetic as that may sound) when I was a young child and it killed me, because I dunno...I really cared about him and it just really broke me inside that my friend...*died*. : ( I'm very flattered and more than a little awed to hear about the impact of the last 2 lines and I'm really proud it had that effect on you. =) Thank you SO much for your feedback and kind comments, Lindsay. You never cease to amaze me with your brilliance! =)
Reviewer: lindsay
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 06:03 pm
Title: 5. A Long Night
those are like the compliments i give people lol, so AWESOME!!!
Im super curious to see what happens in the next two hours, hopefully she disembowels her friends, metaphorically at least. Poor Buffy, thinking it's perverse to enjoy watching a man made of sex eat ice cream, who wouldn't? She has a lot of issues to overcome, but then again, who doesn't? Oh that's right, her friends don't, because theyre "perfect", pffft.
Im really loving this so im on to the next chap, great job!
Author's Response: Hiya lindsay! LOL Haha! Truer words were never spoke, sweetie! I think we *all* have our guilty pleasures which consist of watching Sex on Legs "eating" ice cream...; D Yes, I suppose we all have our personal issues and problems that we have to work out with loved ones or just on our own. Thanks so much for your kind feedback! I'm really happy that you're loving it! *hugs*
Reviewer: lindsay
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 05:49 pm
Title: 4. Young Love
awww, an ice cream parlor, i didnt see that coming lol, the set up yes, not the place.
i can see how dawn and clem relate like that, both closest to people who who let you in, and it makes sense.
SO thanks to you i now want a mint chocolate chip ice cream AND a british blond uber sexy male to be there when i get there. Sigh, you have forever raised my expectations of ice cream parlors lol...ice cream and love, is there a better mix on a hot day?
Loved it, great job
Author's Response: OMG It's my bestie again! *giggles* Hey, Lindsay! =D Yeah, I've always thought that ice cream parlors, well, if I'm trying to establish Buffy as "just a girl", why not exploit her in where "Girls", literally speaking, typically hang out? Haha! Lindsay, girl, don't we *all* want ice cream and Spike? *grins* LOL It's good to hear I can raise expectations....for such...ahem...delicious things. : P Thank you SO much for your review, honey! *hugs and smoochies*
Reviewer: lindsay
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 05:29 pm
Title: 3. Making Plans
“There is no Spike and me,” she said quietly, so quietly that Dawn wondered if she had said anything at all.
And doesnt that sum up how Buffy felt perfectly, good to see a different side of Dawn in this, not so bratty, not so ungrateful that it made us want to claw our eyes out. I still have the ringing in my ear from when Dawn screeched at everyone to "GET OUT" over and over again.
Oh Buffy, when will you learn lol? when you need someone, it's generally because you need them for more then just sex, tsk tsk, our favorite girl in the dark, metaphorically and realistically has so much to learn :)
Good job!!!
Author's Response: Greetings, Lindsay!! =) OMG When a reader quotes a line from my fic, I get all tingly inside!! I love that a particular line is that memorable to you! *hugs*
Ha, yes, I agree COMPLETELY. I thoroughly disliked Dawn in the show and I could not *believe* how disrespectful she was to Buffy. Like, didn't anyone ever teach her to respect her elders? Buffy friggin *died* for her and in season 7, she kicks her *older* sister out of the house. That was Joss Whedon gone bad, I'm sorry. : P Yeah, when she screamed "Get out" like that, I was just like, "Eh, are you like five or something? God, just shut UP." LOL. Haha yes, she definitely does have much to learn! *smooches* Thanks for reviewing again, Lindsay! You're awesome!
Reviewer: lindsay
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 05:22 pm
Title: 2. Severing Ties
Hmmm, Clem and Dawn huh? Before i develop an opinion on this id like to know how old he is lol? If 'young enough' id think it would be really cute, Clem is such a sweetie!
So somehow is plan involves gambling, kittens and poker chips and trouble, i can't wait to read on. When Buffy told him she needed him it broke my heart, but Spike deserves better than her treatment and she deserves better than the treatment her friends give her, i can see this working out quite nicely.
On a side note, did clem have tentacles lol? Has it really been that long since ive rewatched the show???
Good job!
Author's Response: Hey Lindsay! It is *wonderful* to hear from you again! =) Eh, Clem? Oh y'know...like 21. LOL I dunno, really. Let's just go with the whole "yeah they're legal, babe!" =P
Oh yes, Spike *definitely* deserves better treatment than her and while I typically favor season 6 fics, I love the ones where Spike stands up for himself more!
Haha, the tentacles were my own evil invention. I can't quite remember, since I haven't watched an episode w/ Clem in it for a while now, but eh, just go with it. ; ) We'll pretend our fave demon has cutsie tenticles! :P
Thanks SO much, Lindsay!!! =D
Reviewer: lindsay
Anonymous
Date: 07/29/2009 - 04:52 pm
Title: 1. Rough Waters
ok so, no surprise, im hooked! I always loved Clem, and in the episode where Buffy said bye to him as he drove away from Sunnydale always gave me the feeling they would have really gotten on, so that he loves her in this is a pleasant surprise. The fact that we see what Buffy is thinking as opposed to what she's saying is fantastic. As i read on i'm hoping to see a relationship between her, Tara and Anya develop. Anya especially, in a world where truth is a crime she's a vigilante i would definitely love to get to know, i always found her refreshing, it's not that she didn't fit in or was awkward, she was just too honest and it saddens me that there is such a thing, that i myself have lost friends because of it. Maybe i can relate lol, then again if everybody could there would be so much less bullshit in the world. I hope her 'real friends' realize what it is they've done, and i don't mean the resurrection, i mean the forgetting their supposed best friend feels alone because she has to hide how she feels. the way i see life is this, i dont need 30 friends, i have 5 good ones, ones i'd die for and who would die for me. Buffy died for them, however i don't see one who would knowingly do the same without being high on adrenaline or some shit. Off to read some more, fantastic first chap!!!
Author's Response: Hiya Lindsay! *waves* Yeah! *jumps up and down* That episode totally got to me to! I always wondered, what if? What if they had become better friends and had been able to interact more? Would Buffy's relationship with Spike have been any better? *shrugs* I suppose we'll never really know, eh? : P Anyways, yes, again, I *strongly* agree here. While I was a bit iffy about Anya and Xander, Anya by herself was a decent character on the show and she proved to be a really nice person. Tara was always sweet but never really got the attention she deserved, especially from Buffy and Willow. *laughs* Tell me about it. People want ya to be honest and then when they can't handle the truth, it's you who feels like shit. (*not you directly of course :P) And I agree; I think that by sugarcoating everything, we tend to make things even worse. And then, to add insult to injury, people will reprimand you for not telling the truth! *Throws hands in the air* It's a damn crazy world we live in, mhm? Yeah, real friends wouldn't make her feel like she had to hide her feelings...I still don't understand why she was such a pushover on the show. I think it was Once More with Feeling when she was in the middle of yelling at them for the resurrection, and then the "song" stuff started. She never really got to finish, which is what sparks my own curiosity at what she would have said if she hadn't been interrupted. LOL Thank you SO much for your wonderful comments, Lindsay! :D
Reviewer: PhotographyNut
Anonymous
Date: 07/28/2009 - 07:50 pm
Title: 9. Love
Loved how Buffy thanked Clem! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review, PhotographyNut! *hugs* =)
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 07/28/2009 - 01:51 pm
Title: 9. Love
Dawn is 18 already? Then there is not much Buffy can't do about her seeing Clem I think. (Dawn's older here than she was in the TV-Series, huh?) Trust is important. I hope the telling of the friends will go well.
Author's Response: Hiya cordykitten! Aha! I neglected to include in the A/N that Dawn, for the purposes of this AU fic, is 18. Sorry! : ) Also, yes, definitely agree with you there; trust is *definitely* imperative! Thanks SO much for your review! *hugs*
Reviewer: Anonymous
Date: 07/27/2009 - 10:32 pm
Title: 9. Love
um, wait a second, isn't dawn supposed to be 15 here? how is it possible that she's 18?
Author's Response: Terribly sorry about the confusion; in my original posting, I had included the A/N that for the purposes of this story, Dawn was 18. (This is AR/AU after all, hon! : P) Thanks for the comment anyhow! Good to know people still pay attention to the little things!! :D *hugs*
Reviewer: Brett
Anonymous
Date: 07/27/2009 - 09:33 pm
Title: 9. Love
Hehe! I loved when Spike and Buffy walked in on Dawn and Clem. SO funny. I mean really what is a kitten doing in Spike's crypt, its right unmanly.
Author's Response: Heeey Brett! It's great to hear from you again! LOL I know, I was like, "It must be done! They *must* walk in the crazy sex because it's like, inevitable and a joke just waiting to happen!* Ha, I'm glad you liked the kitten. And damn it, it *is* right unmanly!! :P Thanks for your review! *hugs*
Reviewer: PhotographyNut
Anonymous
Date: 07/27/2009 - 07:57 pm
Title: 8. True Confessions
Glad Buffy finally told Spike she loved him! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Hey PhotographyNut! Mhm, I'm definitely glad too! It's about damn time! : ) I'm glad you liked the chapter! More soon! Thanks for reviewing! *hugs*
Reviewer: cordykitten Signed
Date: 07/26/2009 - 06:29 am
Title: 8. True Confessions
Well Dawn/Clem is definitely nothing for me. ;)
It's really good that Buffy talked, opened up to Spike, sharing her feelings/thoughts.
Author's Response: Hiya cordykitten! =) Yeah, it really is a good thing thing that Buffy has finally let Spike in. Good communication for their relationship and all that jazz. : P Thanks for reviewing *hugs*!
