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| Truth and Lies by Celest |
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| jl1980 | Chapter Six | 07/27/2006 06:06 pm |
awww...is he gonna take her forward in time then? very interesting so far....please tell me you havent abandoned this fic...i'd love to see more  |
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| sirc | Chapter Six | 05/17/2006 09:55 am |
| great chapter |
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| Robyn | Chapter Six | 05/10/2006 11:48 pm |
| This didn't feel awkward to me, and perhaps what awkwardness there is aids with the feel of the chapter. The sorrow of Angelus came through so clearly at the knowledge that his daughter can’t stay with him. You have done such a great job of bringing depth and some humanity to him while still keeping him clearly a demon. Thanks for the update. |
| Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad that it didn't seem way too awkward, I thionk I'm better at thoughts than conversation right now, oh well. Thank you again, I always appreciate what you have to say. |
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| vladt | Chapter Six | 05/10/2006 11:36 pm |
| love the update. really hope you feel better soon. thanks for the fine read. |
| Thank you, I'm glad that you're still enjoying the story. And I'm feeling a lot better today (thank god!) and I've already started on the next chapter. |
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| jl1980 | Chapter Five | 07/27/2006 06:02 pm |
| wow...how awful...poor little baby...he was defending her, this time...though that doesn't make up for all the other atrocities he'd committed...great chapter |
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| sirc | Chapter Five | 05/17/2006 09:49 am |
| well done. |
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| vladt | Chapter Five | 05/08/2006 01:42 pm |
| yes! yes, i read every lovely word. yes, i enjoy the way you are moving the story along. yes, i like the mini chapters. yes, i would enjoy longer chapter. yes, just yes! thanks for the fine read. |
| I'm glad you like it, thank you so much for responding to my little inquiry! |
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| Robyn | Chapter Five | 05/08/2006 06:16 am |
Even mini chapters are good.  I like the progression you make in each chapter with their little girl as she ages and learns more about her parents. I am really enjoying the story, and yes I read the introductory part, I read everything you put on the page. |
| Thank you! I know they seem a little random, but they help start the chapter off, I needed something to introduce the next little snapshot of their lives together, so it works. |
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| jl1980 | Chapter Four | 07/27/2006 06:00 pm |
| wow...that's chilling...yet so well written and very well done...great chapter |
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| sirc | Chapter Four | 05/06/2006 06:35 am |
| great chapter |
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| Robyn | Chapter Four | 05/05/2006 12:51 am |
| Thanks for another great chapter. You really did a great job of showing Angelus's care for his daughter while still being an evil demon. |
| Thanks! Whenever I think of him, I think of 'Bad Boys II,' and the druglord. He had men chopped up in his kitchen, but he still doted on his daughter. |
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| vladt | Chapter Four | 05/04/2006 09:22 pm |
| loved the update. thanks for the read. |
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| MarzBar | Chapter Four | 05/04/2006 11:59 am |
| Hmmm. Are the gypsys going to curse Angelus soon? |
| You'll just have to wait and see! But keep in mind: things aren't going to be happening exactly as they did on the show, events are going to be skewed to fit my storyline. You're just going to have to trust me, I know where I'm going with this. The only questions are how long it's going to take, and how much development of the characters and plot is going to be needed to get there. Trust me, you'll understand more as the story progresses. |
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| jl1980 | Chapter Three | 07/27/2006 05:57 pm |
| i love darla getting ignored...lol...excellent chapter..so...i just wanna be sure i get it...is the seer dru, only he just didn't drive her insane? or another seer? or am i not supposed to know yet? lol |
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| sirc | Chapter Three | 05/04/2006 10:35 am |
| great chapter |
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| MarzBar | Chapter Three | 05/03/2006 10:25 pm |
| Lizzie's one tough little cookie! It seems she will be able to take whatever the planet can dish out to her. More story please. |
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| vladt | Chapter Three | 05/03/2006 06:56 pm |
| loved the update. thanks for the enjoyable read. |
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| Robyn | Chapter Three | 05/03/2006 12:17 pm |
| I absolutely love this scene and how well Angelus's little girl manipulated him right back to where she wanted him. You are adding a whole lot of dimensions to him, and to his family. |
| Thanks! I was wondering how you all would react to it, I couldn't quite seem to banish it from my mind, so here it is! Thank you for your continued support Robyn! |
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| sirc | Chapter Two | 05/04/2006 10:32 am |
| great chapter |
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| vladt | Chapter Two | 05/03/2006 06:48 pm |
| excellent read, and that was difficult to write because i so hate angel/angelus. love the tale, more please. thanks for the read. |
| So do I normally! He gets a bit. . . pompous, the way he treats everyone around him, and he's not exactly the sharpest crayon in the box. Yeah, bring hell unto Earth, really smart, exactly. . . what was he going to eat? And aren't really susceptible to fire (if they were going with fire and brimstone)? That always bugged me. |
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| MarzBar | Chapter Two | 05/03/2006 09:41 am |
| Interesting that Angelus managed to impregnate this girl (Dru?). How will Spike come into the family and how will they get even with the Wankers' Council? More story please. |
| I actually just updated. And yeah, it's Dru. Don't worry, you'll find out! |
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| LiquidVamp | Chapter Two | 05/03/2006 08:24 am |
| So far i am loving the direction of the story. At the moment i don't think lack of dialog is holding it back at all. Can't wait for more. |
| Thanks, I've tried to write more dialogue, but always scrap it. It just doesn't fit with what I'm trying to write, so, lots of thinking's going on. Eh. I'm glad it's not affecting the story, thank you so much for taking the time to review! And I should have the next chap up w/i the next two hours. |
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| jl1980 | Chapter Two | 05/03/2006 07:34 am |
| very very good so far...can't wait for more...you portray angelus well, evil and scary but still with emotions...good job |
| Wow. . . thank you so, so much. He's difficult to write, as he's pretty dark. I was worried that I needed to have Dru chained to the bed or something, was worried he was too fluffy. Beware: he hets a bit bunny-like in the next chap, Anya'd hate him! |
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| Robyn | Chapter Two | 05/03/2006 02:33 am |
| Thanks for the update I am still really enjoying this fic. And as for Angelus you are doing a good job with him. |
| Thanks for taking the time to review! I'm glad that he doesn't seem forced, he's the one tugging the most against where I'm going. =) |
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| sirc | Chapter One | 05/04/2006 10:27 am |
| great chapter |
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| jl1980 | Chapter One | 05/03/2006 07:31 am |
| im starting to be quite intrigued by this...off to the next chapter |
| Thank you! i was really worried about that chapter, things didn't move quite as fluidly as I would have liked-I'm glad it still kept your interest, though! |
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| Robyn | Chapter One | 05/02/2006 05:52 pm |
| I really like this fic. I like how you give us the thoughts of the characters as a way of us getting to know them. I am looking forward to the next chapter. |
| Thank you! I was worried that you guys would want more dialogue, I'm trying to keep the setting of the story-namely 1700s-1800s-without compromising its believability, it just wouldn't be "realistic" to hear "like" every five seconds, and it's really hard to write in a way we don't normally speak, without reducing the reader to giggles. There'll be more of a balance later; but there will probably still be more thought than you normally see in most stories. That's just part of my writing style. |
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| vladt | Chapter One | 05/02/2006 02:05 pm |
| very good read, thanks |
| Thanks! I was worried it didn't flow very well. |
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| jl1980 | Prologue | 07/26/2006 11:15 pm |
| very interesting beginning to this tale...looking forward to reading more of it...its an interesting twist on the backstory good job |
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| jl1980 | Prologue | 05/03/2006 07:28 am |
| intriguing start...i very much like this, can't wait to see where you take it |
| Thank you for continuing on-it meant a great deal to me. I just hope it doesn't get too weird...for me, or you guys. I'm trying to get everything down right... |
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| redwulf50 | Prologue | 05/01/2006 05:32 pm |
| ok, good plot, very good start |
| Thank you! Things are going to be a little crazy at first, this is all just background information, I'm just trying to set things up. That's why the chaps are so short! |
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| vladt | Prologue | 05/01/2006 01:51 pm |
| good hook, good beginning. now, we patiently(not) await more. thanks for the fine read. |
| I'm trying to get the chaps out quickly, I submitted chapter one, and am working on chapter two now. |
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| MarzBar | Prologue | 05/01/2006 09:04 am |
| Good start with a big mystery so we must continue to read if we want to find out about the wife and child of the vampire(s). More story soon please. |
| I'm glad you thought so! I was worried I was making it way too obvious where I was going with this. And I'm already half-way through the second part, so I should have it up sometime this afternoon if I like how it turns out. Wish me luck! |
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| sirc | Prologue | 05/01/2006 05:36 am |
| I liked it |
| Thank you! I really appreciate it, I've been nervous ever since I submitted it last night. |
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| Robyn | Prologue | 05/01/2006 02:27 am |
| What a fantastic start, I am glad that you decided to post. I am really looking forward to where you go with this. |
| Thanks! Like I said, this story's been on "repeat" in my head for the past three years, so chapters should come fairly quickly. It's going to get a little rough, but you guys are going to have to trust me on this one. |
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