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| This World That Bleeds by LadyYashka |
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| Isabel | Chapter Ten: The Wizard | 06/27/2006 07:49 pm |
| Very exciting. This is a great story. |
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| Spikes Slayer2 | Chapter Ten: The Wizard | 06/24/2006 10:17 pm |
| ooooh.. its getting very interesting!!! |
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| vladt | Chapter Ten: The Wizard | 06/24/2006 10:13 pm |
| well done. can't wait to see what the last piece is. thanks for the great update. |
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| Lou | Chapter Ten: The Wizard | 06/24/2006 04:49 pm |
| Great action. Really well done, you covered a lot of ground. |
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| jl1980 | Chapter Ten: The Wizard | 06/24/2006 03:53 pm |
he reminds me so much of dru!! another excellent chapter, very well done...can't wait for them all to escape! this story is so fascinating, i'm so sorry to see the update end  |
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| Cewcew | Chapter Ten: The Wizard | 06/24/2006 01:09 pm |
| O boy O boy! guna kick some Initiative ass! |
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| Spikes slayer2 | Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked | 06/23/2006 10:06 pm |
| gee.. every body is trying to destroy things.. !!! |
| Yep! What fun would it be if they left anything standing? ;) |
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| vladt | Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked | 06/23/2006 02:00 pm |
| love the build up. great update, thanks for the read. |
| Thank you!! I'm glad that you like it. |
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| jl1980 | Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked | 06/23/2006 07:18 am |
| wow...the intensity of this update is powerful...very good chapter, bringing everyone together to fight back against the oppressors...but does this mean the story is almost over, because i really hope not!! i love it! |
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I was still buzzing from the concert when I wrote it. =D
I don't think this story is anywhere near finished. Maybe just this part. I have lots of ideas for this whole universe. =) |
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| Lou | Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked | 06/23/2006 07:07 am |
| Oooh - very exciting. Ready to rock'n'roll! |
| Yep! Now everything can go boom.( I hope!) |
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| SpaceLord | Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked | 06/23/2006 06:33 am |
I love the story and all the new characters that we meet. Now if I could only keep it straight too. I know Willow is dead but what about Xander? Can't remember anything about him. What about the rest of Angels Team....damn it's hard to keep it straight  |
I'm glad that you like it. =)
How about when I get this part done I post some of the notes I've made? It might help, but I'm just winging this. The story goes where it wants to go. |
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| Spikes Slayer2 | Chapter 9: Black Sabbath | 06/20/2006 05:59 am |
| what? and who is this person!!! |
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| SpaceLord | Chapter 9: Black Sabbath | 06/20/2006 02:03 am |
| Hmm so has there been a military coup in the US to allow the Initiative to operate like they do? I mean from what I read they pick up humans too and stick them in these camps. |
Yep. It's like those apocoliptic sci-fi movies where the evil military like orgaisation runs everything.Ever seen the movie Tank Girl? Kinda like that.
Hope you like the story though. =) |
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| jl1980 | Chapter 9: Black Sabbath | 06/19/2006 11:54 pm |
| whoa...wonder what the "event" is gonna be...love how you brought giles into it...i feel so bad for the poor prisoners, all of them...and "william" and buffy are starting to bond, even if it's silently...another excellent chapter |
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| vladt | Chapter 9: Black Sabbath | 06/19/2006 09:56 pm |
| good update. looks like confrontation is going to happen soon. thanks for the fun. |
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| Cewcew | Chapter 9: Black Sabbath | 06/19/2006 09:22 pm |
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| nmcil | Chapter 8: Serenity | 06/18/2006 06:22 pm |
| Wonderful new chapters and intro of new characters - much thanks for the quick updates - |
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| wall_flower | Chapter 8: Serenity | 06/18/2006 06:33 am |
| Terrific. I need more! |
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| Spikes Slayer2 | Chapter 8: Serenity | 06/17/2006 10:09 pm |
| great 2 chapters.. i love how you are retelling all of the past events.. very nice.. |
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| Cewcew | Chapter 8: Serenity | 06/17/2006 12:53 pm |
| More!!!! |
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| vladt | Chapter 8: Serenity | 06/17/2006 12:25 pm |
| very good read. thanks love the ending of the chapter. |
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| Lou | Chapter 8: Serenity | 06/17/2006 11:52 am |
| Great adventure - and nicely done with all the back stories. |
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| SpaceLord | Chapter 8: Serenity | 06/17/2006 08:22 am |
| Well this story sure has a nice start....I'm with Kelly about killing them all....that is the way to go |
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| jl1980 | Chapter 8: Serenity | 06/17/2006 08:07 am |
| wow...powerful chapter...you're developing each and every character so well...perfectly done and as always i cant wait for more |
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| Pin1 | Chapter 8: Serenity | 06/17/2006 07:52 am |
| Excellent chapter! I like the way you are handling all of these parallel lines of activities. Great job. |
To Everyone:
I'm SO glad that you guys liked that last chapter. I felt like I'd have better luck banging my head against my desk than actually getting the chapter finished. I am working on chapter nine. so hopefully this one will come out easier than the last. Thank you for the reviews!! =) |
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| Isabel | Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave | 06/21/2006 01:24 pm |
| So glad Willow and Oz found Kelly and she's not dead. Great story. |
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| vladt | Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave | 06/17/2006 12:20 pm |
| nice to see you brought kelly back, even if, sadly. thanks for the read. |
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| wall_flower | Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave | 06/16/2006 01:22 pm |
| Nice connection- very neat. And I love that you've tied Oz into the story too, though the willow part made me choke up a little. Can't wait to read more of this- it's incredible :]] Truly unique my dear. |
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| Missus_grace | Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave | 06/16/2006 11:47 am |
I just discovered this story and I'm glad I jumped in and started reading. Very interesting plot and backstories.
I can't wait to see the rebels crush the Initiative, but I'm sorry that Riley's already dead. I would have enjoyed watching Buffy beat on his traitorous a*s! |
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| Pin | Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave | 06/16/2006 07:22 am |
| Another excellent chapter. I really like your new characters and the way you are placing all of the players on the board. Looking forward to more. |
| I'm really glad you are enjoying this story. Don't worry though, chapter eight has already been started. (228 words so far) ;) |
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| jl1980 | Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave | 06/16/2006 07:14 am |
| oh wow...so kelly's all right!! awesome!!! you see, you've made me care so much about an oc you've only just introduced! you are an excellent writer, i can't believe i've never read your stuff before!! very very good story! can't wait for more |
I just couldn't leave her. ;)
The last story I wrote,before posting here,was sometime in 2001/2002. I posted them to mailing list I'm on. After getting little to no responses I just quit. I couldn't even tell if they were being read. (btw-I really like that feature here)It took me awhile to get the nerve up to try again. I'm glad I did. =) |
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| Isabel | Chapter: 6 Awake | 06/21/2006 01:17 pm |
| Aw, I love Fred! Good girl. |
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| vladt | Chapter: 6 Awake | 06/17/2006 11:37 am |
| fred is a wonderful addition to your cabal. thanks for the fun read. |
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| wall_flower | Chapter: 6 Awake | 06/16/2006 01:18 pm |
| I love the introduction of Fred! Pure genius!! |
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| Spikes Slayer2 | Chapter: 6 Awake | 06/16/2006 01:28 am |
| arrghh fred is a little devious one isnt she.. |
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| Cewcew | Chapter: 6 Awake | 06/15/2006 06:20 pm |
| Man! Lol, Is everyone that works there out to take it down? lol. So loven it! |
| You will just have to wait and see. ;) |
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| Dreylin | Chapter: 6 Awake | 06/15/2006 09:35 am |
| Fred! Fabulous addition to the story. |
| Thanks! I hope you will like the other's I'm throwing in as well. =) |
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| Pin | Chapter: 6 Awake | 06/15/2006 07:59 am |
| I love the way you are building your community of rebels. Each one has his or her own story and reason for fighting. Great concept and you are doing a really nice job of creating this world. Looking forward to more. |
| Thank you! These kind words help me keep writing. Which is a good thing since this story has taken on a life all it's own. =) |
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| jl1980 | Chapter: 6 Awake | 06/15/2006 07:58 am |
| oh i'm so glad you put fred in this story!! it's perfect...she's the perfect good doctor undercover in this nazi-like setting...loving this fic more with every chapter...can't wait for more |
Thanks! I truly hadn't thought of using her until I wrote that. I just wanted a worker who was sympathetic. Then Fred showed up. I’m glad she did too. ;)
: ff to finish next chapter:::
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| vladt | Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath | 06/17/2006 11:32 am |
| building an impressive cast of characters. thanks for the read. |
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| wall_flower | Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath | 06/16/2006 01:16 pm |
| I love the sense of forboding attatched to each of the character's desires for revenge- it really creates a feeling of anticipation. Can't wait to see this operation TAKEN DOWN. |
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| Cewcew | Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath | 06/14/2006 04:54 pm |
| I can see now this is going to one ell of a story cant wait for an update |
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| Pin | Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath | 06/14/2006 11:57 am |
| This is a really fascinating story and I love the array of new characters you've created. Your version of this AU is defnitely interesting and I'm looking forward to more. Thanks! |
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| Syl | Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath | 06/14/2006 10:44 am |
| This is amazing! I am just loving it--please update quickly (keeping fingers tightly crossed!). |
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| jl1980 | Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath | 06/14/2006 07:46 am |
| this just gets better and better..you're weaving this intricate web of characters and siituations that i know will be very important as the story progresses...i am thoroughly enjoying this and cant wait for more |
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| Spikes Slayer2 | Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath | 06/14/2006 06:39 am |
| arrghh!! please update!! i love this!! |
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| Isabel | Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky | 06/21/2006 01:05 pm |
| These people are horrible! Geez, Kelly was just a little girl. I hope she didn't die from the blow to her head. And Tara's father is a first class asshole. |
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| vladt | Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky | 06/17/2006 11:27 am |
| very good update, describing a very disturbing world (or parts of ours.) thanks for the fine read. |
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| wall_flower | Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky | 06/16/2006 01:09 pm |
| Ugh- how terrible! This world gets a little more devestating at every turn. These soldiers are inhumane at best :[ Fantastically gripping story. |
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| jl1980 | Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky | 06/14/2006 07:43 am |
| oh how horrible...you have created a truly horrific yet fascinating world here...love reading this fic...!!! cant wait for more |
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| katakata | Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky | 06/14/2006 02:32 am |
| Interesting world you've outlined here - can't wait to see more of it. Well done on some pretty enticing OCs as well (I'm especially interested in finding out Trey's backstory). |
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| Isabel | Chapter 3: Changes | 06/21/2006 12:58 pm |
| Very original story. I'm enjoying it so far. |
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| vladt | Chapter 3: Changes | 06/17/2006 01:23 am |
| sorry to see dru exit this tale so soon. always had asoft spot for dru. not to the point. excellent tale, thanks for the read. |
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| wall_flower | Chapter 3: Changes | 06/16/2006 01:06 pm |
| Icredible. I really really like this story; your back-story to William is both intriguing and cause for an even more terrifying vampire. This is wonderful. |
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| Lou | Chapter 3: Changes | 06/15/2006 06:11 pm |
| Intriguing. |
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| jl1980 | Chapter 3: Changes | 06/13/2006 06:41 pm |
| oh this is *so* good!! i'm loving this story...you actually brought me to tears for *dru*...so that's saying something! excellent story, i'm now officially hooked can't wait for more |
| COOL! I was worried about that part. Dru is not easy to write. I was shooting for decent when writing her. Besides, it's only fair I made you cry. Your stories have made me cry many times. =) |
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| dragontiff | Chapter 3: Changes | 06/13/2006 06:34 pm |
| great story. i cant wait for more updates |
| Thank You!! |
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| vladt | Chapter 2: Sweet Leaf | 06/17/2006 01:02 am |
| very good read and another intresting character (leaf). thanks for the fun read. |
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| wall_flower | Chapter 2: Sweet Leaf | 06/16/2006 01:01 pm |
| *shivers* oh boy, this is SO good :]] |
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| jl1980 | Chapter 2: Sweet Leaf | 06/13/2006 06:33 pm |
| whoa....tara?? interesting chapter...i love your oc's, very believable and engaging...i'm hooked on this story already |
| Yep! I always liked her and Joss had her killed. Glad I got you hooked! |
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| vladt | Chapter 1: Immune | 06/17/2006 12:52 am |
| love the crptic trey. can't wait to see what "So many lies spinning in head. It is important to clear spider webs before becoming to big," means. very entertaining read, thank you |
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| wall_flower | Chapter 1: Immune | 06/16/2006 12:48 pm |
| About to get very interesting indeed, I'm sure. This is an incredible work- can't wait to see where you'll take the 'William' character :]] Nice one. |
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| jl1980 | Chapter 1: Immune | 06/13/2006 06:30 pm |
| wow...this is intense, and fascinating so far...reminds me very much of holocaust stories i've read...trey reminds me of a male dru sort of...excellent chatper |
| Thanks! I have plans for Trey. Just haven't got any of them ironed out yet. ;) |
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| nmcil | Chapter 1: Immune | 06/13/2006 12:57 pm |
Love your intro - powerful lyrics and a really good intro for your piece - I look forward to reading the work. Please Please Please don't let this work join the ranks of the "abandoned" FF - Really like your sparse structure - your language gives the impact and very good descriptive quality that draws me into wanting to know more about them straight-away.
Good Luck with your work -
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| Thank you!!!! I promise not to abandon this story. That is one of my pet peves. I hate finding a really good story only to have it abandoned. |
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| vladt | Prologue: War Pigs | 06/17/2006 12:42 am |
| "How could she have been so blind?" that is rhetorical? very good beginning, thanks for the read. |
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| wall_flower | Prologue: War Pigs | 06/16/2006 12:35 pm |
| Wonderful start- Great narrative hook. I'm so gripped! |
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| jl1980 | Prologue: War Pigs | 06/13/2006 12:06 am |
| interesting intro...wonder where you're going with this...can't wait to see |
| Thanks! I did post the first chapter at the same time as the prologue but it's not up yet. The second was just posted now. So hopefully they will show up. =) |
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