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| Aloha my love by Isabel |
| Chapter: Welcome to Paradise |
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| Morrigan | 08/01/2006 02:44 am |
Cool story so far. Just one suggestion though... You have different speakers in the same paragraphs in many places, which makes it a little hard to read, because you have to back up and be sure you know who is speaking. It's much easier to read if you always separate the speakers. Please don't take offense though, cause, I'm not knocking you. I made the exact same mistake, when I first started writing and someone had to point that out to me, too. Otherwise, nice story so far. I'm off to read the next chapter.  |
| fallen_angel | 03/29/2006 04:15 pm |
| canada not so much a bad place if u move south to toronto*my home town*, but for spuffy romance it's gotta be maui! so gonna see spike in a hawaiin shirt?or maybe swim gear? or...*puts on devlish smile and goes to check fic rating* |
| lol you're right, nothing wrong with Canada. Especially since I live in Toronto too. Maybe I could write a fic in which Spike goes to T.O... And end up having to work as a stripper for one night because he ran out of cash. Do we have a strip club for women here? I don't even know. We had one in Montreal. Thanks for your review. |
| Robyn | 03/28/2006 07:37 pm |
| This chapter is really cute. I love the exchange so far between Buffy and Spike. |
| ComedyofErrors | 11/27/2005 07:25 pm |
| THis is a great begining. Can't wait to see more. |
| Thanks, I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the fic. |
