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| Rock, Paper, Scissors. by Ariel Dawn |
| Chapter: Rock, Paper, Scissors. |
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| B | 04/06/2006 03:07 pm |
That was good, sweet and hot. Nicely written to. Really liked it.
Only tiny tiny critism i have, 'Ya' isn't a word. I could deal with it in the speech (although, i prefer 'yeah' or just 'yes') but it was in the narrative as well, and that was really jarring. Yes should be used in the narrative i think.
It was in there right at the beginning and i nearly stopped reading because i thought if someone used that in narrative they would use other slang and non-words and it'd be badly written. I'm glad i read on because this was good, and that little word was the only issue i had. Thought i'd mention it just as something to think about. |
| Ok, I can understand that, and I respect your right to not like how I write things. I use the word Ya. Ya, it's not exactly 'proper' however, I dislike how 'yeah' is spelt to such an extent that I do not use it, if I can help it. Perhaps it's a flaw, I'm ok with it. Thanks for your opinion, and I'm really glad you liked the fic other than that word. |
| Oracleholly | 12/24/2005 08:30 pm |
| What a great Christmas prezzie for BTL! Excellent ... I wanna play Rock, Paper, Scissors so Spike can come to my house too. *pouts* |
| hmmm, don't we all...can I have Spike wrapped up and under my tree? |
| redwulf50 | 12/23/2005 06:39 pm |
Great fic, but I still think Buffy needs a spanking  |
| lol wulfie you always think Buffy needs a spanking! |
| ~*~Tasha~*~ | 12/20/2005 10:42 pm |
| Loved this one. Always a treat to read your stories!! |
| Thanks Tasha! *hugs fellow misfit* |
| vladt | 12/18/2005 08:01 am |
| what a lovely christmas present! |
| Thanks |
| kat | 12/16/2005 07:25 pm |
| Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww so sweet lol love holiday stories |
| Glad you like! |
| MarzBar | 12/16/2005 05:37 pm |
| Teeheehee!! Nice snuggly love making and then RAMONES!! Fun story; thank you for sharing BTL's present with us. |
| Glad you like! |
| ComedyofErrors | 12/16/2005 04:30 pm |
| Very sweet; love the finale. |
| Thanks! |
| Lou | 12/16/2005 02:27 pm |
| I just love a good dose of the old festive feelings! |
| Glad you like! |
| Chanel 5 | 12/16/2005 01:55 pm |
Gorgeous - nice and christmassy  |
| Thanks |
| CutieSaiyajin | 12/16/2005 01:38 pm |
| Hee, great story. Loved the ending! |
| Thanks! |
| idk5743228 | 12/16/2005 03:43 am |
| What a way to spend a cold, snowy christmas evening. Do you think I could get Spike delivered? Merry Christmas, LOL Isabella |
| lol, Can I have Spike delivered too? |
| BloodyTearsOfLife | 12/16/2005 02:15 am |
| Oh, I just had to read it again. It was good. *sigh*
And you put it under porn with some plot! *snerk* |
| It doens't have 'some' plot? I'll argue it has at least 1/4 of a plot...that's still some |
| redwulf50 | 12/16/2005 01:19 am |
| LMAO, poor Spike, Poor Joyce, Evil Buffy, she needs a spanking :-> |
| You always think that Buffy needs a spanking wulfie! |
