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Kevin 10/19/04 - 04:13PM 6: Protecting Through Sacrifice Signed
Loved it! Angel keeping tabs on his son is interesting. I hope Angel and Connor get to intersect. Also, I loved the shout out to Firefly. Despite not having either of the primary characters, this chapter did a great job of moving the story forward.

Author's Response: Great that you caught the strait out stolen dialogue from Firefly. I know you are a true fan to be able to catch that. No one else has. It is just one of many of my favorite Firefly quotes. When writing that scene it just fit, so I stole it. Angel/Spike, Mal/Inara...there could be some parallels there, hmmm. : ) Thanks for the positive feedback. I hope you continue to enjoy the story.

Violet SS 07/14/04 - 11:34PM 6: Protecting Through Sacrifice Signed
Thumbs up on the Angel and Spike banter--had me laughing. Interesting thought by Angel at the end of the chapter re Buffy's relationships. Your exposition is great, but I would suggest breaking those long paragraphs into digestible chunks to give punch to your different points. That may keep the reader from scanning through the exposition to get to the dialogue. (And you have to know, from my writing, that I'm a big fan of the exposition).

Author's Response: I want you to know that I have taken your suggestions regarding the length of my expositions to heart. I have spent a good amount of time breaking some of the longer paragraphs up. My story is definitely the better for it. Thanks for the constructive review.

filmtheory 07/07/04 - 12:34AM 6: Protecting Through Sacrifice Signed
This chapter was an excellent combination of exposition and conflict. You explore Angel’s feelings, then immediately force him to hide them from Spike. Your line: “Did he have anyone to talk to? To confide in? Angel doubted it. To be different, especially at Connor’s age, was to kill any hope of a social life.” Was awesome dramatic irony. We, the readers, know what Angel (and Connor) don’t. He does have someone to talk to and confide in. He just doesn’t realize it. I think you definitely have Angel and Spike’s banter down.

Author's Response: I love that you caught that. Sometimes it is so hard to keep from shouting it from the roof tops so that everyone gets it instead of letting it float there and those who get it great, those who don't, maybe the next time around, or just not at all. All the while hoping the story is still enjoyable without this recognition. I'm just glad you caught it. Thanks.






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